Friday, June 10, 2016
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ReplyDeleteTJ I really like your story and how your not the calf but your the dad. But there's something you need to know that you need to put fullstops in. Because when I read this I had to take a very deep breath near the middle to the last part but great job.
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ReplyDeleteHey Tj, I like the bit when you put a theme down below, which was now i learnt from my mistakes. I think you could probably put more interesting words. What was your idea of putting a calf into the story?
I like how you put lots of detail.Just make the words bigger.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have set out your work TJ great job.by abbagale
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