My Holiday
As soon as the holiday started my mum finally let me play on the xbox because there was no more school for two weeks.
I turned it on and got my controllers and me and my brothers played 3 player Call of Duty. It was so fun because we were playing online with other people around the whole world.We were having so much fun.
Until our internet broke down and we had to play 3 player offline it was still fun but I wanted to play window wars with my friends online.If you don’t know what window wars is. You have to use snipers and there are two windows one on one side and one on the other side.One person in each window you, Rules you can't use machine guns or pistols,you can’t get out of your window because it's called window wars.Now that’s how you play window wars.
Me and my brothers love window wars but the only problem was there were 3 of us so it had to be 2v1 instead of 1v1. I'm probably the best cod player in my family and then it goes to my brothers. Sometimes I get bad luck and sometimes I get good luck.
I lie how you started when you started playing not when you woke up. I love how it was a 2v1 instead of 1v1. it would make the story better if you change the i to I.
ReplyDeleteThanks i just fixed it up.
DeleteHello TJ I looked at your blog and it is awesome, I found a few mistakes or things that you could do like at the start when you said Call of Duty you didn't do a space with the full stop before the It and I don't get the one person in a window you Rules part but besides that I Really Like It-Isabella
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feed back that was a tricky mistake even I didn't notice it.
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